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A creak and a bump,
I've been woken up,
Nothing new to me,
They already know I see,
A whisper here and a laugh there,
It's the time when they come near,
A knock on my window,
A bang on my door,
Who ever said ghosts were a folklore?
A hum by my bed,
Something just touched my head,
Some lady's perfume,
Has just came into my room,
I feel them watching me,
Waiting to see if I'll scream,
This is nothing new,
They're just a few,
Lonely spirits in the night,
Visiting the living for their own delight,
Listening to their voices,
Many can't even hear the noises,
I take this ability,
As a sign of my own humanity,
The hum again,
Closer to my head,
A sweet lullaby,
From them wishing me goodnight.
I've been woken up,
Nothing new to me,
They already know I see,
A whisper here and a laugh there,
It's the time when they come near,
A knock on my window,
A bang on my door,
Who ever said ghosts were a folklore?
A hum by my bed,
Something just touched my head,
Some lady's perfume,
Has just came into my room,
I feel them watching me,
Waiting to see if I'll scream,
This is nothing new,
They're just a few,
Lonely spirits in the night,
Visiting the living for their own delight,
Listening to their voices,
Many can't even hear the noises,
I take this ability,
As a sign of my own humanity,
The hum again,
Closer to my head,
A sweet lullaby,
From them wishing me goodnight.
A little something that came to me after thinking of all the times I've been woken up in the middle of the night.
© 2011 - 2024 kaze333
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Overall
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Overall, its a good poem <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="15" height="15" alt="
" title=" (Smile)"/> Keep it up!