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Swimming in an endless sea,
Living under the water so free,
Light above, Darkness below,
Where it started, no one knows.

Searching as I transcend,
Willing to comprehend,
What more could there be,
Other than the endless sea.

Is there another world above?
It's inhabitants able to love?

What would I give,
To find a way to live,
Out of the sea,
If only it could be.

I know not of that world,
Its stories untold,
beckoning me closer,
Like a song from it's composer.

Do I stay or do I swim?
Lose some scales and gain more skin?
Should I leave what I know behind,
And seek out a brighter sky?
I'm pretty proud of this one. I'd like to dedicate this poem to all those lovely mermaids out there.
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19andMugsy Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Nicely penned. I'll tell all those whom I know hehe 
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kaze333 Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you. and Thanks for the :+fav: :)
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:icon19andmugsy:
19andMugsy Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome! :) :hug:
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Lunariel7 Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Shared on my facebook page here: [link] :meow:
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:iconkaze333:
kaze333 Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm so happy you posted this. I've already commented on it :heart:
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Lunariel7 Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
:3
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Redheadmermaid1 Featured By Owner May 18, 2013  Student General Artist
Your a wonderful poet, very nice job
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:iconkaze333:
kaze333 Featured By Owner May 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much.
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fugimoto Featured By Owner May 13, 2013
reminds me of little mermaid! =3
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:iconkaze333:
kaze333 Featured By Owner May 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
That's what I realized when I finished it.
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waiting-for-wings Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
lovely!
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:iconkaze333:
kaze333 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you :)
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Anj3lla Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013   General Artist
This beautiful literary tale has been featured here: [link] :heart:
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:iconkaze333:
kaze333 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much for this link. I absolutely appreciate it and I'm awe of the other works you've featured as well. Thanks so much :hug:
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Anj3lla Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013   General Artist
My pleasure!!! :dalove:
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kaze333 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
And thank you so much for the :+devwatch: I appreciate it :huggle:
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:iconanj3lla:
Anj3lla Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013   General Artist
My pleasure :aww:
Maybe you could take a look at my gallery and if you like
Add me to your watch as well. :)
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:iconkaze333:
kaze333 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Most definitely watching you. Wonderful Gallery :D
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:iconanj3lla:
Anj3lla Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013   General Artist
:aww: Thank You! :icontruesmiles:
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realARTIZT Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
"Part of your world!!!"

I feel like this was made by Ariel herself lol :) This is terrific work Triple 3- The lines I love the most are "Do I stay or do I swim? Lose some scales and gain more skin? Should I leave what I know behind, And seek out a brighter sky?" Just great. :D

Thank you, thank you, thank you for sharing this with us here at #SayItHere!
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kaze333 Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks so much for those kind words. This is by far the best compliment I've received on this. Thank you for liking it :D :hug:
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realARTIZT Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
twas my pleasure :)
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karicom333 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013
This is really amazing!!!!
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:iconkaze333:
kaze333 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much. I'm glad that you enjoy it :)
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karicom333 Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013
Your welcome =) It was very good!
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spotted-cat Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you for posting this. It's a lovely poem.
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kaze333 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome and thank you :)
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spotted-cat Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Your welcome.
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elfproject Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Professional General Artist
metaphorical indeed.
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:iconkaze333:
kaze333 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much.
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:iconanj3lla:
Anj3lla Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013   General Artist
Beautiful done, and a charming poem. :clap:
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:iconkaze333:
kaze333 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much :bow: :bow:
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Anj3lla Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013   General Artist
You're welcome! :frail:
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Demosthenes-H Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Student Writer
Very nice! I love your brevity and meter. It's a very natural poem- and the metaphor is a very clever one!

Keep up the great work!
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kaze333 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much. Your compliment makes me want to write more
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Demosthenes-H Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Student Writer
NEVER stop hahah! :D
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kaze333 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you for those words and thank you for the encouragement :hug:
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Coeb Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013
This poem can be taken so many ways, and that ending proved it marvelously.<3 Thank you so much for sharing this with the community. c:
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kaze333 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much. Your compliment really makes me more proud of it :heart:
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Coeb Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013
:squee: You should be as proud of it as emotionally possible! It really is an amazing poem.
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kaze333 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:glomp: Thank you thank you thank you. So very much :D
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Coeb Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013
Bitte-shonnn! :iconheart3dplz: Your poems are not getting the attention they deserve.
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kaze333 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks so much. I'm trying more and more to get them out there for all to enjoy :hug:
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Coeb Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013
I can't wait to read more! :squee: Dont thank me, I thank you for being so generous and sharing with us!
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kaze333 Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
If I was able to hug you through my computer I would :hug::hug: I suppose emoticons will have to do.
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